Pixar Storyline

I am relooking into the free online Pixar course for story-telling

Here is what I have picked up on so far

Story Beats

To have a very simple action/thing take place

e.g. Character walks across the road. Character picks something up. Character is nearly hit by car.These are each Story Beats (3 beats in this example)

Story spine

This is a great way to summarise every/most stories. From large films to short films

Now to try another Treatment

Once upon a time... There was a young man called Joel. He lived a simple and calm life with his best friend Andrew
Everyday... Joel pushes away the negative thoughts and ideas he thinks of and enjoys life
Until one day... The thoughts take form as negative Fazor, now too loud for Joel to ignore
Because of this... Joel's 'colour' is turning grey and he falls deeper into the harmful thoughts
Because of that... Best friend Andrew steps up to help Joel see the wonderful colour in his life
Because of that... The 'colour war' between Fazor and Andrew takes place (battle of good vs evil/colour vs grey)
Until finally... Joel chooses to get his colour back and lets Fazor go
Ever since then... Joel and Andrew's friendship gets even stronger as the duo looks at the world full of colour

Good. This is already a lot cleaner than my other treatment. I like

Now to flesh out more key events/story beats

START
Joel is reading a book
Fazor whispers in his ear
Joel listens to Fazor going grey
Andrew waltzes in and sees Joel's face
Andrew tries to humour Joel
Fazor interrupts the joke
Joel gets greyer
Andrew tries again
The 'Colour War' begins
Fazor strikes boldly
Joel seems grim
Andrew spreads joy
Fazor takes a step back
Fazor hurls another wave of grey
Andrew dodges skillfully
Andrew blasts a wave of hope
Fazor takes the hope with doubt
Fazor is large now, dominating over Joel
Andrew sends the final strike
Joel now must choose Andrew or Fazor
Joel looks at both
Joel chooses Andrew
Fazor fades away
Joel and Andrew laugh as they leave
END

I like. This would be easy to storyboard. The events are laid out clear for me to read. This will make it clear for the audience when watching

To make a treatment... I don't feel like it. BUT I MUST

The key points are basically the treatment in simple bullet-point form. So, do I really need a treatment... I feel lazy. My bad :)

I am thinking of sending the key points I have to my tutor to get her advice of if it will make a good treatment or not. Because I am lazy :)

I will update the Logline

The battle of negative and positive. Will Joel's mind get the better of him or will his best friend Andrew push him through it?

Smaller. Not bad. Should I include a, battle?? Nah. That could get unnecessary

I am happy with what I have done. My reader-writer is pleased :)